The aim is to declutter the legalese whilst providing a simpler, more efficient and workable framework for a house system.
The first amendment I'd like to put in, is to 1.2:
2. This Charter empowers the Citizens of Osiris to declare a familial allegiance or apply for residency in a named settlement of Osiris, or to found a settlement of Osiris if they meet the criteria established by the Registrar.2. This Charter empowers the Citizens of Osiris to declare a familial allegiance or apply for residency in a named city of Osiris, or to found a city of Osiris if they meet the conditions set down by this act.
I would like that amended to read:3. The Registrar, who will be appointed and may be removed by the Pharaoh, will be primarily responsible for executing this Charter, as well as maintaining living records of any and all officially recognised houses.
3. The Registrar, who will be appointed and may be removed by the Pharaoh, will be primarily responsible for executing this Charter, as well as management of cities, records and other House related details not managed by a specific head of house. The office of the Registrar will be known as the Shaperate, and the Registrar may also be referred to as the Shaper of Memories
About the Shaperate: http://dragonage.wikia.com/wiki/Shaperate (please read!)
I would like to remove the numeric requirement from the Charter, and allow it to be set by the Registrar.
4. The hierarchy of Houses may be defined by the Registrar's Guidelines, as may titling and heraldry. If no house meets the established criteria, then the four houses with the highest number of members will be considered Major Houses. Houses of current or former Pharaohs will always be considered Major Houses. Minor Houses are defined as any house which does not meet the pre-existing criteria. Further criteria may be set by the Registrar at their discretion.4. A Major House is defined as a House which has seven or more members. If no house meets that criteria, then the four houses with the highest number of members will be considered Major Houses. Houses of current or former Pharaohs will always be considered Major Houses. Minor Houses are defined as any house which does not meet the above criteria. Further criteria may be set by the Registrar at their discretion.
Onto Section 2. I would like the Registrar to be responsible for the recognition of Houses with the Pharaoh giving final approval of recognising the house, this would add a certain level of communication between Registrar and Pharaoh.
1. Houses may be recognised by the Registrar with approval from the Pharaoh upon petition. The decision to officially recognise a House is at the discretion of Registrar, with the Pharaoh having final approval or veto over the decision.1. Houses may be recognised by the Pharaoh upon petition, without obligation of the Pharaoh to officially recognise them.
5. Foreign Houses may be recognised at the discretion of the Pharaoh, if and only if they meet the conditions set down by this Act and the Registrar's Guidelines.5. Foreign Houses may be recognised at the discretion of the Pharaoh, if and only if they meet the conditions set down by this Act and the Registrar's Guidelines.
I don't think Section 2 requires any more changes. I would like to again, allow the Registrar to fulfil their job description properly by having more power to police the House and City system and will try to allow that in Section 3.
2. House Status may be dissolved or suspended for a length of time decided by the Pharaoh for actions which infringe against Osiris or damage Osiran standing internationally. The Registrar may, with approval from the Pharaoh, order the suspension or dissolution of a House if it is found to have brought Osiris, or a Noble House into disrepute for their actions either detailed here or in the Registrar's Guidelines.2. House Status may be suspended for a length of time decided by the Pharaoh for actions which infringe against Osiris or damage Osiran standing internationally.
Section 4 is more of a removing the numerical requirements and making the system more accessible.
1. The criteria in order to determine eligibility for the creation of a settlement under their family's rule may be decided and amended by the Registrar as they see fit with approval from the Pharaoh.1. A house of fourteen or more members may petition the Pharaoh for the Creation of a new city in their name.
2. A house of seven or more may request a residential town in accordance with this charter.
2. A house of seven or more may request a residential town in accordance with this charter.
2. Houses must exist for longer than three months before being able to request residential settlements.3. Houses must exist for longer than three months before being able to request residential cities.
4. The Pharaoh and forum administration may organize the placement of cities and towns on the forum as they deem appropriate.
5. The Registrar may amend the requirements for residential cities and towns as necessary, provided such requirements do not contradict this Charter.
3. The Pharaoh and forum administration may organize the placement of settlements on the forum as they deem appropriate.
4. The Registrar may amend the requirements for settlements as necessary, provided such requirements do not contradict this Charter.
Renumbers clauses 3, 4, 5 as 2, 3, 4 respectively.
Spoiler
The House Charter Act
Section 1: General
1. The House Charter will be the fundamental document governing the creation of Houses for the Fraternal Order of Osiris.
2. This Charter empowers the Citizens of Osiris to declare a familial allegiance or apply for residency in a named settlement of Osiris, or to found a settlement of Osiris if they meet the criteria established by the Registrar.
3. The Registrar, who will be appointed and may be removed by the Pharaoh, will be primarily responsible for executing this Charter, as well as management of cities, records and other House related details not managed by a specific head of house. The office of the Registrar will be known as the Shaperate, and the Registrar may also be referred to as the Shaper of Memories
4. The hierarchy of Houses may be defined by the Registrar's Guidelines, as may titling and heraldry. If no house meets the established criteria, then the four houses with the highest number of members will be considered Major Houses. Houses of current or former Pharaohs will always be considered Major Houses. Minor Houses are defined as any house which does not meet the pre-existing criteria. Further criteria may be set by the Registrar at their discretion.
5. A House can only be defined according to the number of Osiran Citizens that count themselves amongst its numbers. A House may not use foreign numbers in official requests.
Section 2: Recognition of House Status
1. Houses may be recognised by the Registrar with approval from the Pharaoh upon petition. The decision to officially recognise a House is at the discretion of Registrar, with the Pharaoh having final approval or veto over the decision.
2. Houses may be recognised by the Pharaoh upon the conferring of an award to a member of a house.
3. The Pharaoh may declare the creation of a House when gifting a city to that house.
4. Citizens may apply for official "House Status" according to Guidelines set down by the Registrar.
5. Foreign Houses may be recognised at the discretion of the Pharaoh, if and only if they meet the conditions set down by this Act and the Registrar's Guidelines.
Section 3: Loss of House Status
1. House Status may be revoked from houses who contain members who have committed high-crimes against the Osiris Fraternal Order.
2. House Status may be dissolved or suspended for a length of time decided by the Pharaoh for actions which infringe against Osiris or damage Osiran standing internationally. The Registrar may, with approval from the Pharaoh, order the suspension or dissolution of a House if it is found to have brought Osiris, or a Noble House into disrepute for their actions either detailed here or in the Registrar's Guidelines.
3. House Status may be lost, or declared "Dormant" according to the Guidelines established by the Registrar, which must be uniformly applied to all Houses.
Section 4: Creation of Cities, Nomarchs and Towns
1. The criteria in order to determine eligibility for the creation of a settlement under their family's rule may be decided and amended by the Registrar as they see fit with approval from the Pharaoh.
2. Houses must exist for longer than three months before being able to request residential settlements.
3. The Pharaoh and forum administration may organize the placement of settlements on the forum as they deem appropriate.
4. The Registrar may amend the requirements for settlements as necessary, provided such requirements do not contradict this Charter.
