Osiris Fraternal Order

Hey guys, I've got one of my writings published online and its a short story. I'll be glad if y'all could read it. Appreciations and Criticisms are highly welcomed =)
I'll be glad if I'd receive suggestions from you, to improve upon my next book! Please let me know your reviews in the RMB or in the regional forum! I hope you like it.
Here's the link :
https://www.booksie.com/505695-the-gift

This is the preview of the story:
" Fates can be so unjust towards some people. There are people who battle misery and impoverishment their whole life. But still, there's nothing they can do. Things are too bad for Dickory. He doesn't know who a Mother is, he is illiterate and his has a father who's struggling hard to make both ends meet.
With time, it seems things have started falling just the way he wants. But then, life decides to shatter him completely and he has no idea about it. He doesn't know that this might be because of his fault. And then, he is waiting for someone who's never going to come back.....Life is never going to return what it has taken from him. Forever."

I'll be sure to read this asap!

Thanks a lot, mate!

Great read! Entertained me while on the road

Kowassati wrote:Tue May 23, 2017 8:02 pmGreat read! Entertained me while on the road

Thanks for reading it Your review shall be my encouragement!